What Good News Looks Like:

Hello Charles;

I enjoyed reading your draft and your insightful critique of (The Author)'s writings. I made my observations directly on the copy. In terms of overall structure, I have the following suggestions:

a) Make sure to reread your thesis for fluidity. There are certain sections that are repetitious and need clarification.

b) You may consider attenuating the biographical component of (The Author)'s life. You have enough text analysis that speaks of (The Author)'s condition as author and individual. You could omit a few passages about his past without compromising the integrity of your analysis.

c) Think about the choice of certain key terms: dislocation, relocation, dissociation, etc. and their application to the context at hand. Are you using these terms in a consistent manner?

c) Lastly, polish up your draft. The content is clearly there, but you need to go over your thesis and
clarify and reword certain areas.


Your overall thesis is solid, insightful, and unique. You should now concentrate on making the necessary modifications so that you can submit it.


Nice Work!